Day 2 Alcatraz Part 2

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This will be out NO MATTER WHAT! June 7th, which is this Tuesday. I have worked alot on it today and am GOING to make it work to come out on Tuesday. For now here is the cliff hanging sneak peak:
Day 2 :Alcatraz part 2
?GO!? Boomed the warden.
Right after the warden said this almost all the t?s jumped for the next block, a lot of people missed and was shot as soon as they hit the ground. What is this place? How could they get away with this!? Sigma VP and I were still on the first block waiting for the next block to clear up and have more space for us to jump to it. However the warden said you must be moving to a new block every 10 seconds. This was rushing us. VP was still injured from his blow to the head. We began counting to 10. When we hit 8 we all jumped to the next block. We did this for the next ten blocks or so. After we made the jump to the tenth block the warden said we will accept 3 winners or until 3 people are alive. I looked around and saw only one other player. We had to continue jumping. This next jump was going to be tricky It was really far and steep as well. Me and Sigma made it just fine but VP only had 4 more seconds to make the jump.
?JUMP VP!? I yelled. As he jumped I knew from the start he wasn?t going to make it. He reached his hands out hoping to grab the ledge. He missed. Me and Sigma both dropped down on our stomachs to grab VP?s hand. We got him right before he fell.
?HAHAHA! This is the best entertainment all week!? Boomed the warden.
VP was too weak, he could not hold on to us any longer. We tried to pull him back up but it was too late.
?Just let go you guys, Go on and escape this jail without me!? yelled VP.
?We cant do that VP!? But before I could finish the sentence he slipped out of our hands and fell to the ground. I knew he had a few seconds to live before getting shot. I closed my eyes and waited for the gunshot.
 
Nice Story, That Boe Jangles, Is a pretty excellent warden.
 
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A suggestion I have to make your stories a bit more readable is to space them a little more. A wall of text is a bit intimidating, but if you space the text out, a page becomes paragraphs.
 
Like I said before, needs more anime. And more wombats. Good part two.
 
I could always do some editing if you didn't mind.
 
I <3 these stories! You should make it into a media team movie!

to do this i would need:
editor
filmer
private server
countless hours
and all the people featured in the stories playing
so if you can get me this i will in fact do that lol

editor-muffinz :P
 
to do this i would need:
editor
filmer
private server
countless hours
moral support
and all the people featured in the stories playing
so if you can get me this i will in fact do that lol

editor-muffinz :P
moral support - _MEGA

Fixed.
 
to do this i would need:
editor
filmer
private server
countless hours
and all the people featured in the stories playing
so if you can get me this i will in fact do that lol

editor-muffinz :P

We could probably get some people to do this if you wanted. Talk to maybe Ill legend for the media team. They have some pretty good people there that can make art work, and record and what not
 
We could probably get some people to do this if you wanted. Talk to maybe Ill legend for the media team. They have some pretty good people there that can make art work, and record and what not

maybe maybe.... but this would be after day 10-inception
 
That was pretty cool! Finish the novel and then make it into a movie ;)
 
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