My German poem (includes translation)

[blackhawksniper]

For German class I had to write a 16 line poem with 4 stanzas, didnt have to rhyme, but mine does. Here it is!


Dich und Mich ( You and me)

Mit dich
Ich bin lebend
Mit dich Ich bin alles dass Ich kann gebend

Ohne dich
Mein Augen ist Rot
Ohne dich
Ich fühle Tot

Woher du bist
Ich kann nicht gehen
Ich kann nicht essen
Ich muss abgereist

Hat ich versagt dich
Kannst du mich vergeben
Es war nicht mich
Warum tun hat sie gegangen

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Now in English this means


With you
I am alive
With you
I am all that I can be

Without you
My eyes are red
Without you
I feel dead

Where you are
I can not go
I can not eat
I must depart(leave)

Have I failed you
Can you forgive me
It was not me
Why did you have to go

Thats my poem. Pretty deep eh?


and NO I AM NOT EMO! lol ;p

 

[Sharp67]

very nice and very emotional man A+

 

[cccp]

YOU forgot TITLE
Minus UN PUNTO
B

 

[blackhawksniper]

Alright, edited and Title added

I've been listening to too much rammstein lately.

My inspiriation for this was the song Ohne dich they have it on youtube with a cool music video and subtitles

 

[PainNa55]

I defiantly say your emo blackhawk, Romantic had's nothing on you =) But it is a nice poem

 

[Cpt0bvi0u5]

woah im out of it i thought i was in request ban >.<

 

[blackhawksniper]

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woah im out of it i thought i was in request ban >.<
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:O


lol

 

[Redspring]

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Mein Augen ist Rot
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Shouldn't it be: Meine Augen sind Rot

But it's a good poem

 

[Chuckles]

Nice job!!!!

 

[sneakaduck]

I really liked it, good job dude! Kinda reminds me of a situation I find myself in lately...

 

[blackhawksniper]

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Mein Augen ist Rot
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Shouldn't it be: Meine Augen sind Rot

But it's a good poem

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Ich spreche Deutsche nicht so gut ;p