Entertaining a desire to dissappear

[HeavenKiller]

To fade from this earth, leaving all behind
Far from thought, an escape of mind
Calling in from above, the angel of death
Looking at myself, realizing nothing's left

Alone in this life, I am not missed
The scars of cuts, too many to list
As I fall down, away from the light
Sinking into the shadows, the eternal night

Fading now, from sight of this place
The blood of my soul, delicious to taste
From blackness we came, and to it I return
A darkness from within, continuing to burn

To fade from this earth, leaving nothing behind
Far from thought, an escape of mind
Falling below, to a spike-ridden cleft
Looking at myself, realizing nothing's left

 

[Frazar]

hmm... rhyming poem but i believe it lacks a meter as which to go by. The first 2 stanzas seem to be in Hexameter, but the rest seems to fall away. Other then that it was beautiful!

 

[HeavenKiller]

True to a degree but you can adapt meter through the reading process with emphasis and tempo... you can keep a very similar meter just by how you say words, and not just the syllabic content...

 

[ManBearPig]

isn't there a forum for writing? If not there should be