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I have hit a small roadblock in my book. I will be scrapping chapter 10 and also posting a new story which will fit in with the main one at some point. Thanks giving one will too but I have to decide on the when.
Here is the 1st chapter of the new story (later to be part of main book).
Prison
It was dark outside. No one knew what time it was but they could see how dark it was when guards opened a door. The cell-block was filled with bright light all day and the lights did not turn out when they usually do. “What’s going on?” asked David. The a guard walked in and climbed up a ladder onto a metal walkway. “That’s the warden, he never comes here personally, but do everything he says or bad things happen.” said Michael. “Attention everyone! When your cell doors open please take one step out and face your cell. If you try to move or look around you will face the consequences.” announced the warden. The cell doors sprung open and the prisoners all followed the warden's orders. One prisoner made a run for another cell that he had previously found a vent inside. The guards opened fire and killed him before he could make it. “Whaaa…” started David. Michael cut him off saying “shut up dude, you might end up like the other guy”. The warden began giving new orders. “I want all guards in position and I want all prisoners to slowly walk and follow me”. David and Michael walked slowly side by side and joined the main group of prisoners. Guards blocked the other door across the building while more stood above the prisoners as they exited the door in front of them. They passed under the walkway and through the main door. Outside there were bushes on the right and a building on the left. The warden ordered everyone to proceed through the left door of that building. One prisoner made a run for the door on the right but was shot before he could make it. Everyone else crowded inside and waited. Out of the corner of his eye, David noticed gas descending from the ceiling. He shoved people out of the way as he dashed over to the door. It was too late, he felt tired and fell to the floor just before the door. He woke up lying next to Michael. The room around them was filled with bright light and platforms were hanging from the ceiling around the open room. “Clearly we have been moved after they drugged us” said Michael. The warden began to speak, “Hello again everyone, today we will be playing a game of climb. You need to jump from platform to platform all the way up to the top. If you fall you can go restart, but if you try to leave you will die. If you do not win then you will die. We will be taking three winners and you may have as much time as you would like. If you decide not to participate then you will die. Alright then you may begin. The room had a small border separating what must have been the starting zone and the climb course. The floor beyond the border was filled with water to catch anyone that fell. Many people started rushing the course while three people and waited their turn. Michael, David, and another person all patiently waited while the warden watched them. Many people fell off pretty earlier and got drenched in water. Some even broke their legs when they landed as the water wasn’t very deep. The guards shot anyone that couldn’t get out of the water in a reasonable time. The water began to turn a distinct red color. “Who are you?” asked David. The third unknown person with them ignored the question and stepped up to the first platform. He took a deep breath and ran. Both David and Michael were stunned while they watched this other guy run and jump from platform to platform like it was nothing. The man finally reached the top and sat down. David felt a bit of courage and moved up to the first platform. He looked around cautiously and then made the first jump. The air flew past him and everything seemed to slow down. Then time rushed back and he landed on the second platform. That wasn’t so bad he thought. He steadied himself and moved to the next one. After landing it turned to wave Michael to come. Michael wasn’t the most athletic person and struggled get speed on the small platform. After jumping he landed and felt much better. David then moved on from platform to platform taking his time and waiting for Michael to follow. They had been carefully climbing for half an hour and David noticed the guards changing out. He started to think of a possible escape but quickly flushed out the thought. Michael shouted David’s name and gave him a look of annoyance. David realized Michael was waiting for him to jump. He turned around, stepped back, and ran across the platform. At the end he leaped out pushing with his feet. Once again the air rushed past and time slowed down. David noticed this platform was a much higher difference than the previous ones. Fear struck in as he saw that the his feet would not land. Time quickly began to speed up and David hit the platform with his knees. He had the wind knocked out of him but quickly grabbed the edge of the platform with his arms and started to pull himself up. Michael could only stare in shock while David struggled to get up. When he did get though Michael realized it was his turn to jump. David called down to him saying he would catch him and help him up. Michael jumped and grabbed hold of David’s hands before he could fall to the floor below. He pulled him up and over onto the platform. They both remembered the rules of this game. The warden never said they couldn’t help each other. The people below that could still continue watched and figured out for themselves how to continue. Everyone began to rush up the platforms. Michael and David got up and quickly began moving on up. The pressure continued building as the people below caught up to them. In the end it was too late for everyone else. Every guard was aiming at the prisoners and the moment Michael and David reached the last platform they opened fire.
Scrapped Chapter Ten
Here is the 1st chapter of the new story (later to be part of main book).
Prison
It was dark outside. No one knew what time it was but they could see how dark it was when guards opened a door. The cell-block was filled with bright light all day and the lights did not turn out when they usually do. “What’s going on?” asked David. The a guard walked in and climbed up a ladder onto a metal walkway. “That’s the warden, he never comes here personally, but do everything he says or bad things happen.” said Michael. “Attention everyone! When your cell doors open please take one step out and face your cell. If you try to move or look around you will face the consequences.” announced the warden. The cell doors sprung open and the prisoners all followed the warden's orders. One prisoner made a run for another cell that he had previously found a vent inside. The guards opened fire and killed him before he could make it. “Whaaa…” started David. Michael cut him off saying “shut up dude, you might end up like the other guy”. The warden began giving new orders. “I want all guards in position and I want all prisoners to slowly walk and follow me”. David and Michael walked slowly side by side and joined the main group of prisoners. Guards blocked the other door across the building while more stood above the prisoners as they exited the door in front of them. They passed under the walkway and through the main door. Outside there were bushes on the right and a building on the left. The warden ordered everyone to proceed through the left door of that building. One prisoner made a run for the door on the right but was shot before he could make it. Everyone else crowded inside and waited. Out of the corner of his eye, David noticed gas descending from the ceiling. He shoved people out of the way as he dashed over to the door. It was too late, he felt tired and fell to the floor just before the door. He woke up lying next to Michael. The room around them was filled with bright light and platforms were hanging from the ceiling around the open room. “Clearly we have been moved after they drugged us” said Michael. The warden began to speak, “Hello again everyone, today we will be playing a game of climb. You need to jump from platform to platform all the way up to the top. If you fall you can go restart, but if you try to leave you will die. If you do not win then you will die. We will be taking three winners and you may have as much time as you would like. If you decide not to participate then you will die. Alright then you may begin. The room had a small border separating what must have been the starting zone and the climb course. The floor beyond the border was filled with water to catch anyone that fell. Many people started rushing the course while three people and waited their turn. Michael, David, and another person all patiently waited while the warden watched them. Many people fell off pretty earlier and got drenched in water. Some even broke their legs when they landed as the water wasn’t very deep. The guards shot anyone that couldn’t get out of the water in a reasonable time. The water began to turn a distinct red color. “Who are you?” asked David. The third unknown person with them ignored the question and stepped up to the first platform. He took a deep breath and ran. Both David and Michael were stunned while they watched this other guy run and jump from platform to platform like it was nothing. The man finally reached the top and sat down. David felt a bit of courage and moved up to the first platform. He looked around cautiously and then made the first jump. The air flew past him and everything seemed to slow down. Then time rushed back and he landed on the second platform. That wasn’t so bad he thought. He steadied himself and moved to the next one. After landing it turned to wave Michael to come. Michael wasn’t the most athletic person and struggled get speed on the small platform. After jumping he landed and felt much better. David then moved on from platform to platform taking his time and waiting for Michael to follow. They had been carefully climbing for half an hour and David noticed the guards changing out. He started to think of a possible escape but quickly flushed out the thought. Michael shouted David’s name and gave him a look of annoyance. David realized Michael was waiting for him to jump. He turned around, stepped back, and ran across the platform. At the end he leaped out pushing with his feet. Once again the air rushed past and time slowed down. David noticed this platform was a much higher difference than the previous ones. Fear struck in as he saw that the his feet would not land. Time quickly began to speed up and David hit the platform with his knees. He had the wind knocked out of him but quickly grabbed the edge of the platform with his arms and started to pull himself up. Michael could only stare in shock while David struggled to get up. When he did get though Michael realized it was his turn to jump. David called down to him saying he would catch him and help him up. Michael jumped and grabbed hold of David’s hands before he could fall to the floor below. He pulled him up and over onto the platform. They both remembered the rules of this game. The warden never said they couldn’t help each other. The people below that could still continue watched and figured out for themselves how to continue. Everyone began to rush up the platforms. Michael and David got up and quickly began moving on up. The pressure continued building as the people below caught up to them. In the end it was too late for everyone else. Every guard was aiming at the prisoners and the moment Michael and David reached the last platform they opened fire.
Scrapped Chapter Ten
Chapter Ten: New Arrival
They were back on the road again. This time they had made an enemy of another private security corporation. That was not their only problem. The people despised them and would most likely give their position away every time they stopped. The public could not be underestimated. People can easily form small gangs to track people down or deal with them themselves. Everyone in the humvee decided they need to focus on their plan and not make anymore stops unless they ultimately had too. “I hope you don’t have to pee any time soon” said Larry from the front. The journey had been restarted and they were now heading down the road to accomplish their first objective. Investigating and killing any members of the Traitors cult around a previous known location for their meetings. Not long after the start, their journey came to an abrupt pause when a man stood in the center of the road. Sound walls were on both sides so Larry could not go off road while the man moved to stay in front of the humvee whenever it moved. Eventually Larry lost his temper. He asked SJ to get in the drivers seat and then he jumped out of the vehicle. “What do you think you’re doing blocking us from driving!?” questioned Larry. “Oh hello there! I want your help in filming my youtube video” said the man. “Get out of our way or so help me I will shoot you” replied Larry. “I don’t think you will. What’s your name? People call me Uber because they think I act like a maniac sometimes”. Larry didn’t understand the relation between Uber and maniac at all. Larry lifted his gun but then a thought popped into his head. What if this guy could document what they do so the public opinion can be changed and they won’t be arrested. “Get in the vehicle and shut up” he said. Uber quickly ran to one side, opened the door, and got in. Everyone inside stared him down while Larry started driving again. SJ looked up the words uber and maniac to find a pretty big following of someone named Ubermaniac. He then picked a video and was slightly stunned the two people looked exactly the same. After exiting the video SJ decided to read more about this Uber guy. In his research he found that Uber does a lot of filming and research into crimes and conspiracies. He also does comedy entertainment on a separate channel. During the trip Uber interviewed everyone in the humvee. He also was given a run down of the current situation and how they got to it. Stan felt that somehow this whole thing was starting to seem fun. He was meeting new people, making friends, and adventuring out into the world.
After occasionally stopping a message came in on their radio. “In case you wanted to know, I’m not dead yet” said Christian through the radio. “Woah, who’s not dead yet?” asked Uber. “I don’t remember that voice, who is this?” questioned Christian. “He’s no one” said Larry. “Alright, we are following you right now and will catch up soon enough. We were able to get the location of the Traitor cult home base. Don’t ask how we got it, just know it was worth the trouble”. Christian ended their conversation leaving everyone anxious, especially Uber.
They were back on the road again. This time they had made an enemy of another private security corporation. That was not their only problem. The people despised them and would most likely give their position away every time they stopped. The public could not be underestimated. People can easily form small gangs to track people down or deal with them themselves. Everyone in the humvee decided they need to focus on their plan and not make anymore stops unless they ultimately had too. “I hope you don’t have to pee any time soon” said Larry from the front. The journey had been restarted and they were now heading down the road to accomplish their first objective. Investigating and killing any members of the Traitors cult around a previous known location for their meetings. Not long after the start, their journey came to an abrupt pause when a man stood in the center of the road. Sound walls were on both sides so Larry could not go off road while the man moved to stay in front of the humvee whenever it moved. Eventually Larry lost his temper. He asked SJ to get in the drivers seat and then he jumped out of the vehicle. “What do you think you’re doing blocking us from driving!?” questioned Larry. “Oh hello there! I want your help in filming my youtube video” said the man. “Get out of our way or so help me I will shoot you” replied Larry. “I don’t think you will. What’s your name? People call me Uber because they think I act like a maniac sometimes”. Larry didn’t understand the relation between Uber and maniac at all. Larry lifted his gun but then a thought popped into his head. What if this guy could document what they do so the public opinion can be changed and they won’t be arrested. “Get in the vehicle and shut up” he said. Uber quickly ran to one side, opened the door, and got in. Everyone inside stared him down while Larry started driving again. SJ looked up the words uber and maniac to find a pretty big following of someone named Ubermaniac. He then picked a video and was slightly stunned the two people looked exactly the same. After exiting the video SJ decided to read more about this Uber guy. In his research he found that Uber does a lot of filming and research into crimes and conspiracies. He also does comedy entertainment on a separate channel. During the trip Uber interviewed everyone in the humvee. He also was given a run down of the current situation and how they got to it. Stan felt that somehow this whole thing was starting to seem fun. He was meeting new people, making friends, and adventuring out into the world.
After occasionally stopping a message came in on their radio. “In case you wanted to know, I’m not dead yet” said Christian through the radio. “Woah, who’s not dead yet?” asked Uber. “I don’t remember that voice, who is this?” questioned Christian. “He’s no one” said Larry. “Alright, we are following you right now and will catch up soon enough. We were able to get the location of the Traitor cult home base. Don’t ask how we got it, just know it was worth the trouble”. Christian ended their conversation leaving everyone anxious, especially Uber.
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