Wow that was pretty good! I loved every second of it and it made me proud to be in eGO. The only thing that i would even consider editing is to not make is seem so much like we are huge. Display that, yes, he have thousands of members, but NOT make that the reason to join. You should probably include something about how we are all about MATURITY and ethics. Doesn't have to be the theme, but definitely needs to be in there. (imo)